Originally Posted by PK3434
You certainly know how to rhyme...the rhymes are good..the imagery is not that great though. You are skilled with putting words together but it doesnt exactly give the reader a great picture of what you are trying to convey or invoke a lot of feeling. However, a good portion of rap depends on the voice and flow of the rapper which is impossible to tell from just reading words on a paper.
thank you , i will use these in my research essay. i want to become a better writer and rapping is secondary as a side hobby( although i wouldn't mind being a great rapper as well but i don't see myself making money off of it, i just want to be original ....again thank you for your input i will take what you said into account when i practice.)